Today, my writing students are going to get the following, non-graded quiz. All the examples here are taken from actual student papers handed in to me in the past. Although there are some outright errors below, most of the sentences are serviceable but wordy or convoluted.
What is either wrong or weak
about the following sentences? Revise to
remove those problems.
1. In order to analyze their results, the
researchers used an ANOVA.
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2. The study would seem to suggest that males
are more physically aggressive than females.
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3. It has been found that honey bees can detect
ultraviolet radiation.
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4. The study examined the role of anxiety levels
in racial stereotyping.
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5. The researchers were interested in studying
the effects of temperature on test taking.
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6. The patient exhibited flattened effect.
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7. When the participant was exposed to the test
stimulus they showed a strong reaction.
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8. Charles Darwin finds that there are remarkable
similarities between humans and other primate species.
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9. There have been a lot of studies done to
investigate the role of anger in punishment.
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10. Heroin is an elicit drug.
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11. They gathered data from 17 women; all of whom
were taking birth control pills.
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12. Participants were asked to sign a consent
form before filling out the survey.
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