Speaking strictly as a reader now, and not as a writer, I
want to say a few things about the kind of advice that new writers are often
given. I may be something of a unique reader, so for all of you who want to
write, take my comments with a grain of salt. I know you need readers, not just
one reader, not just me.
First, many recent writing guides suggest that starting with
dialogue is a good idea. As a reader, I absolutely hate this. Most of the books
I’ve picked up and put back down after a few sentences are ones that began with
dialogue. Ann Rice’s Interview with the
Vampire is an example. Some writers can create truly excellent dialogue,
but the fact is that I don’t care about what the character says until I begin
to get a feeling for the inner nature of the character. That means, I need to
see them acting, not talking.
Second, I’ve been told all my writing life that you never
start a story with the weather. As a
reader, I absolutely love it when writers do this. Now, it needs to be good
strong weather, and the character needs to be pitted against it, but—for me—opening
with a character fighting against a storm, or freezing cold, or violent high
seas instantly catches my attention and brings me into the tale. There is
immediate intense conflict. Many of my favorite reads begin with the character
facing off against nature. Westerns
often begin this way. Perhaps my favorite short story of all time, Jack London’s
“To Build a Fire” begins this way. Note that, for me, a beating sun or a cold, dark night also constitute a form of weather.
As far as openings that catch my attention, what do I
personally like as a reader? A character placed in a strong setting with
conflict looming, or at least with a question as to why the character is in
this place. Here’s the opening to the book I’ve reread more than any
other, To Tame a Land, by Louis L’Amour.
“It was Indian country, and when our
wheel busted, none of them would stop. They just rolled on by and left us
setting there, my pap and me.”
Here’s the first two lines of The Road, my favorite of Cormac McCarthy’s books: “When he woke in the woods in the dark and
the cold of the night he’d reach out to touch the child sleeping beside him.
Nights dark beyond darkness and the days more gray each one than what had gone
before.”
Here’s the opening paragraph of Teot’s War by Heather Gladney. It’s got everything I crave for an
opening, and poetry too! “Heat beat down
on my shoulders, my face cloth. My armor dragged at the riding sores
underneath. Little sparkles danced behind my eyelids, and the strains in my
joints were cramping to knots in the muscles. It had been a long ride. A
grating call made my shoulders twitch. The carrion crows, who glided after us
day after day, were waiting.”
Instructive as always, Charles. Thank you
ReplyDeleteinteresting and really good writing, I wonder how does Gone With The Wind start, it must be the conversation they had on the verandah, but that book I read after I saw them acting and knew them well...
ReplyDeleteI quite agree, Charles. The "rule" about weather is one of Elmore Leonard's but, like in the examples you're giving, he says that if it's for the character's reaction to the weather, then it's fine. :-)
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ReplyDeleteLisa, I've never read that book. I should give it a read. I don't think I have a copy. By the way, I tried to visit your blog but it says I have to be invited.
Vesper, yes, the character needs to be in there. Not just a description of weather. I agree with that.
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ReplyDeleteI like novels that begin something like this...
ReplyDeleteThe war kept dragging on like a plague.
Our early victories have been slowly choked out, and bitterly erased; the small victories we have managed since do little except sap our strength; an epilogue to the inevitable collapse we witness now.
The Dark Queen's forces - and those of her consorts - with slow sureness, and power augmented by dark arcana, draw ever tighter around Vingaard, that ancient seat of the knighthood. The peasants of the surrounding plains had long ago fled, or were now scattered bones along with those of their families, in muddy and scorched fields that once saw wheat and rye taller than the children of the forgotten good times, the times of peace now 100 years beyond the reach of memory of any who currently live. A fable that at once provides hope and mocks our efforts.
The war, and this world of unnaturally darkened skies and powerful storms and the hordes of ogres from the brooding mountains of the south, along with their terrible allies, the dragons, children of the Dark Queen, was all any of them could remember.
This is strongly reminiscent of how Legend of Huma opens. But it's my version having not read it in a long time. Mine, but not so much so that I would try to publish it professionally.
That's good to know. I have started one story with a line of dialogue, but feedback told me it was a good line to use. The next two started with a leading line of action and I think were even better.
ReplyDeleteAs long as a story doesn't start with paragraphs of description, I'll keep reading.
A great writer can make anything work. As for the rest of us...But I hate novels that begin with pages of dialog. I want the scene set and the character described through what he/she is thinking or doing. Not physical descriptions though.
ReplyDeleteeric1313, I do like a fantasy story that begins with a good hint of history. It sets up conflict to come and really centers us in the setting.
ReplyDeleteAlex, I was looking at my stuff and found I've started one or two short stories with dialogue, but usually only a single line before something happens.
Patti, A little physical description of people goes a long way. I don't mind some.
I had to go back and check how I started my latest, but it wasn't with dialogue. I re-read it and decided I liked it the way it is. Thanks, Charles.
ReplyDeleteCharles-for me it is more about the overall relevance. I do prefer to have the setting in my imagination first.
ReplyDeleteThis is why I have an allergy to writing "rules."
ReplyDeleteGreat examples, Charles. The Road is a favorite of mine as well.
Any post that tips a hat to "To Build a Fire" gets a thumbs-up from me. I love that story, and think about it particularly this time of year when I often find myself out in the snowy woods.
ReplyDeleteI love a story starting with weather also. It sets the scene.
ReplyDeleteCharles, I don't like novels opening with dialogues either unless I'm reading a short story or non-serious fiction, the kind meant to be read for fun and taken with a pinch of salt. Opening lines often decide whether I'm going to like the book or not.
ReplyDeleteAll of those are great openings. My favorite opening line of all time is from Hunter S. Thompson's Fear & Loathing in Las Vegas: "We were somewhere around Barstow, on the edge of the desert, when the drugs began to take hold." (Pretty sure I'm quoting it right.)
ReplyDeleteOscar, i'm guessing my reading experiences as a kid shaped this kind of feeling on my part.
ReplyDeleteJodi, yes, I like to be centered in a tale first thing.
Sarah, the Road was so bleak but I could not put it down.
Chris, such an awesome tale.
Riot Kitty, that's my feeling on it.
Prashant, that's very true for me.
Greg, I remember that opening line. Sets you up for a wild ride.
Rules are to be broken... Weather can give us much more information (time of year, etc) and good dialogue does draw my interest as I wonder what the characters are talking about.
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