But too much description can lead to over-writing (Say it on: purple prose). I think you did not over-write your two example passages from Wings Over Talera in the blog just before this one (and I understand that sci-fi writing needs to be a bit "goosed"), but the passage where "Vohanna took another step toward me. And a third. Down the skull steps from her throne she came, and it seemed her sandals spurned the dusky wine that cascaded beneath her feet. Her eyes teemed with scarlet embers and with...other things"--had me almost doing a double- take. But I stayed with the passion of the writing. It made me think of what the late Norman Mailer used to say about writing: The rendering of powerfully felt emotion, on the printed page, with elegance and tact.
But in the last count, I'd say you do write beatifully, certainly with elegance and tact.
I like suggestive, rather than MANY words!
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I... depends on the subject. But i like being suggestive... and in some cases, clear.
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Cloudia, that's the best way. Just enough to create an image in the reader's head.
ReplyDeleteDeka, you're right. I guess that's why writing is still an art and not a science.
A good description of using good description.
ReplyDeleteOscar, thanks!
ReplyDeleteOn NS: Agreed. The more different from the every day present, the more helpful are the telling details folded in.
ReplyDeleteAdd: unless you want readers to think of every day now things in a different way, like Picasso vision or its equivalent.
I always enjoy your teaching, heading that way now.
ReplyDeleteErik, I think that kind of distortion of reality is used a lot in horror fiction. Take something normal and make it 'different' in some way.
ReplyDeleteOcean girl, thankee!
No question that you write very well!
ReplyDeleteBut too much description can lead to over-writing (Say it on: purple prose).
I think you did not over-write your two example passages from Wings Over Talera in the blog just before this one (and I understand that sci-fi writing needs to be a bit "goosed"), but the passage where "Vohanna took another step toward me. And a third. Down the skull steps from her throne she came, and it seemed her sandals spurned the dusky wine that cascaded beneath her feet. Her eyes teemed with scarlet embers and with...other things"--had me almost doing a double- take.
But I stayed with the passion of the writing.
It made me think of what the late Norman Mailer used to say about writing: The rendering of powerfully felt emotion, on the printed page, with elegance and tact.
But in the last count, I'd say you do write beatifully, certainly with elegance and tact.
Ivan, thanks. I appreciate that, as one wordsmith to another. Personally, I much enjoy purple-tinged prose, although it can certainly go too far.
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