tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post3811238080214263354..comments2024-02-12T17:59:33.534-06:00Comments on RAZORED ZEN: The BoxerCharles Gramlichhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-57237404384297097322015-03-26T11:27:53.816-05:002015-03-26T11:27:53.816-05:00X. Dell, thanks, man.
Mark, I believe he doubts h...X. Dell, thanks, man.<br /><br />Mark, I believe he doubts his ability to win. :)<br />Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-4727815237608724402015-03-26T05:09:40.449-05:002015-03-26T05:09:40.449-05:00Must have been late in the fight or he punched him...Must have been late in the fight or he punched himself out early or he'd be thinking "how many more jabs before i hit him with the knock out?"the walking manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10058913927297370740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-55702054680146494622015-03-25T20:20:44.080-05:002015-03-25T20:20:44.080-05:00Powerful sense of foreboding that you depict here....Powerful sense of foreboding that you depict here.X. Dellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17561609651507566271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-49852831234139915522015-03-25T08:27:35.133-05:002015-03-25T08:27:35.133-05:00Szelsofa, you are correct! ;)
Ivan, thankee, man....Szelsofa, you are correct! ;)<br /><br />Ivan, thankee, man.<br /><br />Oscar, thanks. I spent quite a lot of time trying to get it right.<br /><br />Gordon, thanks for visiting.<br /><br />Snowbrush, me too.<br /><br />David J., glad to hear that.<br /><br />Patti, thank you.<br /><br />Jodi, the roar. I need to get that in there.<br /><br />Erik, a metaphor for life.<br /><br />Greg, thanks. I appreciate it.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-39329723459012601962015-03-25T05:28:01.994-05:002015-03-25T05:28:01.994-05:00nice opening! it really draws you in.nice opening! it really draws you in.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15344808703550376121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-32674590501402938332015-03-24T20:34:29.983-05:002015-03-24T20:34:29.983-05:00It's got me, certainly. Such a primal sport, w...It's got me, certainly. Such a primal sport, with a few modern trappings added. Erik Donald Francehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02332500850365598564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-14704473090892496862015-03-24T07:41:34.447-05:002015-03-24T07:41:34.447-05:00Charles-I am a boxer and I love it. Just sparring-...Charles-I am a boxer and I love it. Just sparring-no ring. Too old for that! Your boxer might have a roar in his head and Vaseline on his face!jodihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01798858210138821711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-60578488037980933952015-03-24T06:20:27.016-05:002015-03-24T06:20:27.016-05:00Great scene. Can feel that heartbeat.Great scene. Can feel that heartbeat.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-11747022423319247222015-03-23T17:03:17.904-05:002015-03-23T17:03:17.904-05:00I like that, can feel the tension and sweat in the...I like that, can feel the tension and sweat in the air.nephite blood spartan hearthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17092519999184585295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-64256669969345240352015-03-23T13:43:08.580-05:002015-03-23T13:43:08.580-05:00I'm with him.I'm with him.Snowbrushhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00436087215476479042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-86343829617561008212015-03-22T13:44:30.731-05:002015-03-22T13:44:30.731-05:00I remember those dsys well, and you've caught ...I remember those dsys well, and you've caught the moments between rounds perfectly.Oscar Casehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10328166606910469945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-60621778111003441822015-03-22T10:35:59.526-05:002015-03-22T10:35:59.526-05:00Great scenario. Journeyman writing!
And I agree ...Great scenario. Journeyman writing!<br /><br /> And I agree with Szelsofa.<br />Strong scene, and the whole scene could be an allegory.<br />...Come to think of it a definite allegory.<br />I am 76 and it's durn hard to get up these days and hit 'em with a left and a right. :)ivanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05662075375182633162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-51088662493644863832015-03-22T10:23:25.569-05:002015-03-22T10:23:25.569-05:00A strong scene, indeed. I did not mind some of the...A strong scene, indeed. I did not mind some of the repetitions. It made the main character more tired and perhaps, a bit older (than he should be to cope with all that awaits him in the ring).<br />Also I sense the whole scene may be an allegory.<br /><br />SzelsofaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-26351174916764317722015-03-22T08:39:19.880-05:002015-03-22T08:39:19.880-05:00Lisa, he's one tired fellow.
Sage, it's s...Lisa, he's one tired fellow.<br /><br />Sage, it's still pretty rough draft but cutting is always a good thing.<br /><br />Cloudia, thanks.<br /><br />aimless, I could certainly feel it myself.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-47407845568912117072015-03-22T05:29:26.029-05:002015-03-22T05:29:26.029-05:00I can feel his exhaustion and pain. Well done! I can feel his exhaustion and pain. Well done! Aimlesswriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03012050763172251381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-27130120901356651522015-03-22T01:50:33.396-05:002015-03-22T01:50:33.396-05:00You make us hear the bell
ALOHA from Honolulu
...You make us hear the bell<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />ALOHA from Honolulu<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">ComfortSpiral</a><br /> =^..^=Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-36400537738258366262015-03-21T19:29:11.239-05:002015-03-21T19:29:11.239-05:00Glad I'm not him... nice capture of a scene; ...Glad I'm not him... nice capture of a scene; you could tighen it up a bit by cutting some repetitive words. sagehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17499891950639742366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-55371239325598199432015-03-21T17:17:06.895-05:002015-03-21T17:17:06.895-05:00interesting scene, never really thought what a box...interesting scene, never really thought what a boxer would be thinking during that break time, you got it and it is what we feel and think too most of the timeLisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02399300464457820101noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-49359197375229437172015-03-21T16:28:40.871-05:002015-03-21T16:28:40.871-05:00Bernard, thanks, man.
Ty, probably Costigan is a ...Bernard, thanks, man.<br /><br />Ty, probably Costigan is a part of the influence.<br /><br />Weekend-Windup, thanks for visiting.<br /><br />Prashant, I've actually never been able to watch much boxing because of that.<br /><br />Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-15701618110264774582015-03-21T13:03:52.852-05:002015-03-21T13:03:52.852-05:00Nice one, Charles. I have always wondered what dri...Nice one, Charles. I have always wondered what drives boxers into the ring. My father used to say it was the most cruel sport.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-3539509677839247062015-03-21T12:27:06.998-05:002015-03-21T12:27:06.998-05:00Nice to read this...Nice to read this...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-59329296677561393382015-03-21T11:27:09.675-05:002015-03-21T11:27:09.675-05:00Very nice opener. Looking forward to see where it ...Very nice opener. Looking forward to see where it goes. For some reason my mind sees an older Steve Costigan nearly ready to retire from the ring.Tyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09192814826756623212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28221839.post-76845871436494046382015-03-21T08:41:19.212-05:002015-03-21T08:41:19.212-05:00Strong scene - it reminds me of the Simon & Ga...Strong scene - it reminds me of the Simon & Garfunkel song 'The Boxer'. Boxing is one of those realities in sports though where very few reluctantly participate. BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.com